Twinkle4ever

Downstairs, the lights were back and everyone was in the lounge with a piece of cake on a plates. They were all looking at Vanessa who was hunched back into ...

Chapter 1: Vanessa’s Mysterious Past “It can’t be ruined. Nothing can ruin this day. Today’s my birthday and mom and the others have come to visit me.” Vanessa Aden had ...

It was a short but sweet poetry. I liked the parts where you repeated the same line twice in one paragraph. You could have written a bit more but It's ...

The poem was quite interesting. I like the way you've written 'I want to be forever young' in every paragraph to emphasize it. In the very last line, 'when my ...

I really enjoyed reading this story. It's got me wondering what will happen next. It's so full of suspense and excitement. There were no gramatical mistakes that I could find. ...

I'm really touched deep down inside by your poetry. The emotions you've put into it just filled my eyes. I would suggest that you work more on the poetry than ...

I like all three sketches. Colour or no colour. It's still amazing. And it definitely looks like a lovely princess. And the third one looks magical. :)

The bubbles look so magical. Simple yet colourful beauty. And the russian dolls are simply a piece of art. The little strawberries look so cute and bright. Full of life. ...

I suggest that you work a little on the face expression. Give it a cute look. Make her smile whole-heartedly, if you know what I mean. Show both her eyes. ...

Prologue A long time ago, there used to be a town called Ocultos lama which is Spanish for Hidden Flame. All the people living there had a Hidden Flame inside ...

I think the title you've chosen for the poem is perfect. It suits it. I really liked the part where you wrote 'A splash of bold colors' as in the ...

I really lost track of everything while I was reading your story. I was so mesmerized with it. You're a fine writer. And I'm looking forward for more chapters :)

I think it's a really interesting poem. I like the way you've written every para completely different from the previous one. And the last para really gives it a good ...

I'm not so familier with songs or poetries but now that I've read your song, I really enjoyed it. I'm really looking forward to read more. :)

I loved it. There is a lot of suspense as far as I can tell and it makes me want to read more. It shows the work of a creative ...