Twinflower

Hi there, I agree with the other reviewers that you need to break this up into several smaller paragraphs. Mallory, even though she was my mom prefered me to call ...

Thanks! I dunno why a seagull--i really like seagulls for some reason, and i thought it was cool that they had a nest way up in the mountains. :mrgreen:

here are some photos i took up at Willawa lakes, near anchorage, ak. 1. The triangular mountain is willawa 2. Seagull! :D it's mate dive-bombed me after i took this ...

Hi! Seeing as no one's critiqued this yet, i'll give it a stab. First off, I think you should cut the character list and pronunciation guide, or at least post ...

I like in the second one how the tree branches seem to surround the top of the tower. I also like number 4, but maybe it'd look better without the ...

One: Charcolee Ann Chefferd of Gidale A young woman sat on the grassy bank of a lake, just outside the town of Gidale, weaving a basket from the thick reeds ...

I really enjoyed this--i kept thinking of how cute illustrations would be for it. I think the rhythm and rhyme fit the subject well--seemed sort of dreamy and playful. Great ...

Lonely dog, Black against the snow-stained ground, Head swings back and forth, Searching. Hungry dog, Empty-bellied, with calloused paws And cold joints Trembling. Old dog, Sight’s been gone and hea

I liked some of your ideas here, probably the ones under "silence", "cheerful", and "wise" the most. However, you delivered them a little blandly. They would be more striking if ...

I was trying to portray that the person singing was not really real, and so the words the narrator heard were just figments of his/her own imagination. Also, i don't ...

I carry you in my bones, Drag you around in my chest; You are an unwanted stone Buried deep into my flesh. Where are you when I hear Your voice, ...

Thanks for the comments everybody! I agree about the "stubborn brokeness" being too bulky for that line and changed it to "your stubborn rents would not mend". i hope that ...

I toiled late into the night, With needle and golden thread I worked, trying to sew Your heart together again. My sore fingers are red now, With your blood or ...

First of all, a few little things: "Take my hand (,) don (') t let me be. " "I ' m sorry for the pain (I've) caused, I love you ...

These are really nice! My favorites are "Wet Needles" and "This is My Prison". The first picture is just a bit too dark, in my opinion. I also like the ...