TwinSeed

Ah, reelationships. What a topic. And what a poem you've made from it! In the first stanza, I really like how you captured the imprisonment of love, of how you ...

I've never been good at talking in present tense, but I've been trying to work on that. However, to me, even the last couple of lines seemed to be in ...

I'm also part of this contest and see that we have two clearly different topics, haha. Not being sure what exactly you're talking about, I'll critique it as best I ...

Thank you both, I was going for the affect of realism and emotions specifically, and it looks like I hit that right on the head. @josh: Yes, I used few ...

Ahaha, lovely. Monsters, what a wonderful topic. However, I sense that these aren't fairytale monsters that you're talking about, which makes it all the better (being as that's what most ...

You have skill, much more than I do. Personally, I like how you made that mark on the pig's neck, showing that its head is turned. A LOT of people ...

Well this is a short story, not a poem, but thanks anyway. Hehe. Your kind words are much appreciated.

Hahaha, jcha, that was quite an episode you had. Made me laugh. Which is healthy, especially after this poem gets you down. Don't get me wrong, I loved it. And ...

*I made this for a little contest* **My theme is to write about the effect(s) of death, or life after death, in 150 words or less** Death of an Angel ...

*I'm not sure if this is against the rules or not..* For not 50, not 35, but for only... 5 points I will make you a poem. You may be ...

I'm going to break this down by what I thought and felt at certain parts of the poem. Ready? Go. The very first line is where I'll start. Eternal sleep... ...

Thanks Kattie! As you can see, I worked to keep the same rhythm here.

Thank you very much! It's always encouraging to hear praise. If you liked this as much as you claim, then I suggest looking at my other works. EDIT: StoryWeaver: Thank ...

*I have written this poem to describe how I feel people would react, if I told them my secret.. PM me to know* Why do you stare? You don't even ...

Let me start by saying, thank you for asking me to review this. You did a great job. Everything was so detailed, except the people. I actually felt cool while ...