TwinSeed

*This is my second entry for the 150 words or less contest, hosted by joshuapaul* One of Those Days... You know the feeling when everything goes right? It was one ...

I love how you've captured the feel of the story, how it has to do with everyday stuff that goes on in the streets (well, that's what I get from ...

Welll, these new stanzas.. they seem a bit forced. They aren't written quite as well. I still like them though, and you have the same general theme. I'm not really ...

Woww. Quite a review. I understand what you mean though, even if you did just saythe same thing over and over in 100 words xD

I agree, this is lovely writing, but hasn't lived up to its potential. The first stanza is superb, I just want to nit-pick. It should read something like "The freckles ...

As stated above, this is very simple. That may work for some subjects, but not stress. One reason is because not all stress is bad. There's good stress, happy stress, ...

Well I didn't actually read about it, I just googled pictures of it XD I'll review your works anytime if you ask. Don't worry, I'll keep it a secret o-o'

Honestly, this was quite confusing and hard for me to decipher. I see the weight of God weather wrinkled canyons to sand. This sentence, this two lines, were actually incredible ...

You know the only thing that'd be better? Watching a pig doing any other kind of exercise xD I was mesmerized after looking at this! I just couldn't pull my ...

This poem was so peaceful :3 I like your use of scenery, and I applaud you. We listen to the crickets, and my forgotten coqui. My first instinct after reading ...

I agree, she needs elbows and knees :P Sense that's my opening statement, I'll tell you what I think of the girl first. My first thought when I looked over ...

On the back cover, the words seems so.. out there. So much contrast between it and the rest of the cover. Maybe you could find some way to make the ...

Well now isn't this.. interesting. Heh.. As josh, I'm not really an art critic. In fact, my forte' is poetry, but I shall tell you my opinions anyway. First of ...

I caught myself feeling confused a lot, because of your lack of punctuation. In most places that you left blank, you should add a comma or period, otherwise it all ...

First I was like "...", then I was like "-.O', then I was like "..wtf? -fear-" In the first three lines I was worried, concerned for everyone's safety. Literately. It ...