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Wow, this was really well-written. The first thing I noticed about it was the paragraph length; they were more or less equal, without any giant walls of text with little ...

I don't really see how this is fantasy, but it's interesting. Here's a few nitpicks: The monster balled his hand into a bullet and got ready to aim. I think ...

What kind of concentration camp are you talking about? Cuban or Nazi? Because if it's Nazi, then the child's parents would be taken too, especially if they were the ones ...

Is this for a class assignment? Because you might know that there already is a book about the Holocaust by someone who actually lived through it (Diaries of Anne Frank). ...

Wow! This is great! I really like the rhyme scheme, it works well with the flow. Is this about Pygmalion?

Nice beginning. It's hard to say much about it so far, because there's so little to talk about. One thing I'm wondering though: how does Xavier know two years have ...

Wow, great twist at the end! I love the idea and the way you carried it out, but Ben's dialogue is completely unbelievable. “Girls are complicated creatures, my love. There ...

The narrative voice is a little shaky, but overall I like the theme and the idea of it. It is strange that the things we remember from our childhood are ...

Looks good, but I think it could use more description to round out the paragraphs. It'll just make everything more readable, but the story itself was interesting and I liked ...

Wow, I can see how this would take a serious chunk of time! It looks just like an etching from the 1800's or something.... very nice, very detailed! ^^

"Don't expect me to cry don't expect me to lie don't expect me to die for thee..." -Kurt Cobain, "Jesus Doesn't Want Me for a Sunbeam" Before I really got ...

PSYCHOLOGIST. That should help with your lysdexia. About the story, it was a pretty funny twist at the end, but why did the psychologist say she was a time-traveler and ...