Trident

Another Cancer here. I never liked the title of that sign... it's a horrible disease after all! And welcome Krystalstars!

Woe is me, woe is me, Life has been unfair to thee, A warm house, a full belly; I have it bad, can’t you see? A leather throne upon I ...

Even though it is commonly said that you should write every day no matter what your disposition, I find myself in the mood to write at some times more than ...

Part II RELIC-- The sun shined through the window onto her face. The morning tired her old bones, yet she rose day after day. It took a great deal of ...

Whoa, weird. I am one of six as well, but I'm in the MIDDLE. Two brothers and three sisters. I was of course the unimportant one as a middle child. ...

Not everyone starts at the beginning. It would be an interesting way of writing, and it might give you some insights that writing from beginning to end doesn't offer. Try ...

Cass, hope I can help you with these... Problem one: x = father's age, y = son's age equation one x = 6y the father's age is six times the ...

Welcome Alana. Maybe I'll get around to looking at one of your stories. All the best.

Yes, I would cut down on the "he replied", "she sighed". Most of the time this isn't even necessary because the words themselves describe how they say them. The story ...

Part II The morning sun bounced off the granite walls that towered above him. Small shadows of tree branches swaying in the wind danced in the light and a brief, ...

I have slivers after that altercation. Okay, do you think I should have him reliving this moment and add action instead of dialogue? I have considered dumping the whole beginning ...

She's a machination of his subconscious mind. Her purpose is explained later. Wouldn't you invent someone in your loneliness? :cry:

Part One Maurice. Alone. Alone in a granite cell with a thousand thoughts of a thousand dreams and then some. It was easiest when he didn’t think, didn’t try to ...

Welcome! You should fit right in around here. :)

It's not always important to know exactly what a person is doing when they talk. Just having back and forth dialogue can more efficiently show emotion and intent. But if ...