Trident

Okay, I liked the idea, it was something that could happen to anyone, and it was kinda creepy. Numbers should be written out so it should be five. Times are ...

Incan, even you modesty has an air of vanity to it. :P Okay at first I didn't realize why this story was in the science fiction section and then I ...

Right... evidently you don't quite understand what an info-dump is otherwise you would try to take your beginning and do something with it. Perhaps your signature should be changed from ...

Okay, chapters two, three, and four were absolutely amazing. I came into this thinking 'Ok, here we go. I'm going to read three chapters and it's going to take a ...

Hey Vampirewolf. I'll just touch on the basics here. The first paragraph is what is known as an info-dump. It is kind of boring for the reader as there is ...

Chuff, you didn't sound arrogant at all, so don't apologize. It was posted here so she could get a critique. For me, this story was really an exercise in bad ...

Welcome Ben! I do hope that your work is not always so downer. If it's good, then most of us here will appreciate it, but lately we've had so many ...

Hooray for Big Brother! Let's just hope my computer screen isn't a telescreen. Happy b-day! PS. I didn't realize Big Brother was a cat.

For some reason, your narrator reminds me a bit of a flapper-- adventurous, feminine, wild and daring. If that's not your intention, then just ignore me. :P I loved it ...

Try putting spaces in between your paragraphs. ;) Then I'm sure some of us will take the time to read it.

Hi there! I'm trident. I'm not big on poetry, but I sometimes get around to reading it. I don't know much about it, so unfortunately I can't give you any ...

Granted, but then the universe implodes in on itself! (you ask the impossible Imp!) I wish I never got advertisements on the Internet.

"Let it come. And soon enough." --General Kiran Raiz "I am new to death. It fills me with dread, to be honest. I'd rather not experience the pain if it ...

Interesting concept. Okay, here we go: Opening Credits We Are All On Drugs - Weezer Oh dear, I hope not. Waking Up Bohemian Rhapsody - Queen Not quite fitting, but ...

Okay DD, I've started reading The Chair. It's late, so I've only read the prologue and chapter one, so hopefully I can get to the rest soon. I tried to ...