Trident

I think this quote is taken very much out of context. If you write only about things you know to be a fact, then fiction would be non-existant. What I ...

"Ha, when it's my fist against another's nose." -- Colonel Kiran Raiz "I long for it each time I am separated from him . If the Council ever found out..." ...

All right Sureal, you've been busy giving crits to others, so I thought it was time you were rewarded with one yourself. :D I was very impressed. Your dialgoue was ...

Hello euterpe. May I ask the meaning behind your screen name? Anyway, welcome to YWS! I hope you have a good time here. This place surely has an enormous impact ...

Granted, you get your wish. :D I wish I could learn through osmosis by putting a page up to my head.

Congrats DD!

Hmmm... I found this rather dry. Why would the first day of summer break be on April Fools' Day? That doesn't really make any sense. Plus, I know a lot ...

I found the writing much better in this chapter. The dialogue was of about the same calibur as last chapter, so I think it was what you had to say ...

My first thought was that this was going to be an angst story, but you put enough realism into it that it wasn't. There was less bitching than actual action ...

Thanks you two for the comments. And I especially appreciate your professionalism vampirewolf after I had a lot of criticism on your piece. (I suppose that leet at the bottom ...

[Erm... I'm not sure where I want to put what chapters where, so I'm going to label them as A1, A2, B1, B2, C1, C2... to follow the different storylines ...

All right, I'll try to get around the major points while looking at some minor. “You’re not human…are you?” I don't think that ellipses is necessary in that case. I ...

Welcome Lila. It is unlikely someone would try to steal another person's idea, but if they do, than you have a dated proof that your idea was posted here first. ...

You need to be patient Lycan. People do have lives outside of this site. Plus NaNo is going on right now, so the writers here are spending less time critiquing ...

Okay, this is a problem many of us have. It's not easy trying to decide if what you have is worth keeping or not. So what you need to learn ...