Trident

I found this appealing, gummy. I'm not sure if "Minha" has any significance to it, but the title was a nice one to fit the ending.

I'm in. And I promise to be on my best. :D

I am sorry Lycan if you thought my critique was mean. Perhaps it was. I don't typically look at the age of who I am critiquing, and truthfully, it shouldn't ...

This made absolutely no sense to me. It was too short to understand anything. It was about a paragraph and you already introduced five or six characters. If you expect ...

Welcome! Don't be shy about diving in. We're typically a friendly bunch.

Parts III & IV VICTIM-- A harsh shrieking. He slammed his fist into the alarm clock. Nine minutes passed. A harsh shrieking. He threw the damn thing across the room. ...

I decided to check this place out. If I get any irrational comments, I'll let you know. My story is now in their queue. It looks like you have another ...

I remember reading the last version of this. I agree this one is much better. The cold turned nasty, it bit his arms, legs and skin all over, sharp shocks ...

Chapter B1 Representatives Arthur Darius and Gaius Linus--beloved brother of the Seigneur--navigated the harsh corridors of the Hall of Mannith Tyr. The armies of Seigneur Linus sat outside the city ...

Hmmm... not a huge fan of them. I do sometimes use a bagel for sandwiches when I have no white bread. Pathetic, I know.

Welcome ledrokker. A fan of the Zeppelin perhaps? You mention stories, are you more of a prose writer then? Or perhaps poetry? Either case, you've come to a great place.

Unless your teacher said specifically to put into your introduction why you chose your topic, ditch it. That is a bad way to start an essay. It looked like you ...

Part IV “Get up, Maurice, get up!” He shuffled around on the straw mattress. The night still shrouded the cell in darkness. “Now!” He got up. “What? What do you ...

Lycan, I suggest you abandon this whole concept. It lacks in creativity and originality. It felt as if you one day had an idea in your mind about a group ...

^ 10/10 Nice quote. Great imagery.