Trident

Myth, I caught everything right away. I understood what roles the characters took. Certainly, I could understand if one had missed an important phrase and got caught up and weirded ...

It was a bit hard to get into. The structure was a bit weak and the first paragraph turned me off. I felt like I was reading an angsty story, ...

I feel like I get about the right amount. Of course, it would be nice to get more reviews, but beggars can't be choosers. I definitely give more reviews than ...

Plausibility: Setting One of the most important aspects of a story is its plausibility. In order for a reader to even consider continuing on with a story, they have to ...

Nice Imp. That's an insane amount right there. :)

This was nice. I like how it didn't give too much away to the reader. One thing, if he says this: “I give some people power, but I didn’t give ...

All right lizard, here we go. :D I feel this needs something more than what you have. I can see you have a nice plot ready and a good story ...

Nagem, write a letter to the teacher who overlooks the paper. There is usually some sort of advisor that has control over the paper. If the letter is just articulate ...

To start off, this is a very plausible situation. It could easily happen in the real world. In fact, this very type of conversation probably happens hundreds of times each ...

Chapter C1 It was a storage home for death. Large pick-shaped blades, deep-gouging spiked barbs, ragged teethed saws, and several chains linking one tool to another. They littered the aged ...

There are several authors who never went to school or went to a "less prestigious" school. Writing can be a self taught art. I don't believe Fredrick Douglass went to ...

Well I seem to write about a little bit of everything, but that doesn't mean anything. Some authors write about the same thing over and over again only with different ...

Erm... yay? :wink: Now you truly can take over the world! Because of benzene-ethanol... distillation... I have no clue what that was about. *above Trident's head* Well good work. You ...

"I live high north." -- Lady Jayce "North, in Trydia" -- Queen Mother Amelia Do you get seasick?

Welcome to YWS! There seem to be a lot of people here from Missouri. Did you get snowed out this week too? Prepare to better your writing. I know mine ...