Trident

7/10 It's a cute puppy. Unfortunately, it's a cute puppy.

Tiny white knuckles, gentle baby's knees. The way that changing a foul diaper never offends. True baby's breath. Not as flowery as a bouquet, but just as sweet, and twice ...

Er... sorry to inform you of this, but this a writing site. If you expect us to take the time to look at your work, then you better well have ...

Welcome to YWS. I see this is your first story posted. Okay, to start off, military writing, whether it be in the past, present, or future, is always fun to ...

Erm... no offensive or anything, but I wasn't a big fan of this poem. It felt like you tried to incorporate too many different... flavors? It left me feeling as ...

Erm... isn't that part of the poem? If not, my apologies. But you use the bold type later so... Anyway, I thought this was very graphic, in a good way. ...

Hello Kyle. YWS is a good environment if you want to improve your writing. Welcome and have a good look around.

(Er... another lame attempt of mine at poetry. Do not be too lenient. I must learn after all.) One of those tepid nights where the coat-less shiver and fools play ...

Well I've got my ten! But I do plan to crit more. :D

The beginning's a bit slow-- I assume that's intentional as to not give away the profession too early. It was even more trouble when your PA was on some sort ...

"Santa? Is that a god? Or perhaps an enemy agent? What do you know about this 'Santa'?" --Marion Have you ever broken a bone?

"Fear? It's not part of the job description." --Marion "Fear is often what drives us to make decisions. Unfortunately, often they are the wrong decisions." --Queen Mother Amelia Do you ...

All right, I read this a while back, and I guess I'll comment on it now. It will certainly help in my crit count. :D I didn't like it. The ...

This kind of story is always fun to read. I love when small historical quirks find their way in, and when you write a real person such as Khrushchev, it's ...

The brides were previosuly buried, yes, but ancient cultures often dug up graves of the family members (especially spouses) of important rulers and reburied them with the ruler. I suppose ...