Trident

Thanks for spacing that. ;) You started off well. The description wasn't superfluous. However... One person in particular, walking at a fast pace, was heading towards the main square. I'm ...

Jeeseble-- You're just going to have to go in and put spaces between the paragraphs. That's the best way to make it easier to read.

Yes, fastbreaks was just my neologism for breakfast. Does it sound too out there? Thanks Cass!

I stand here and watch the busybodies. Electric doors, street vendors, warm exhaust fumes choke the passersby. Mistletoe boughs climb street poles and Santa’s bell rings lightly. I stand and ...

He was in a prison facility. An especially angry-looking man stood over him. Maurice realized he was in the Piano Room. “Where’s the last sample?” the man asked. He would ...

Hey Gabrielle, welcome to YWS. Make sure you give some critiques to others on the site before you post any more work. Members tend to get annoyed if all you ...

Religion and politics in one... here we go! Religion has always, first and foremost, a way for humanity to reason out their origins. Where did we come from and why ...

Fishr-- that's fascinating! We have a cemetary right next to our school, but it's newer. No older gravestones. rosethorn-- That's a beautiful story. I would love it if you wrote ...

All right, I've given this piece a good look. It was a bit annoying to keep reading the same part over again, but I got over it. ;) Everyone else ...

Thanks a ton all. :D Green: You read it from the first and continued on. Thanks for your perseverance. Cameron: Thank you as well for your comments. Jenna: I really ...

Welcome to YWS blackwings! Before I start, I just want to mention that you might want to get in some critiques of other works before you post anything else. You ...

Hehe, I like it. Kinda reminds me of Jack from the Nightmare Before Christmas... at least I think his name is Jack.

Hehe, Cass, how could I resist? The Blessed under Fantasy Fiction. There are three parts. Choose whichever one-- they're not dependant upon each other. :D Thanks!

Well I think you have to skip around at least a little bit. Especially with longer stuff. If you don't, some pieces will drive you rather mad. But I also ...

Haha-- Incan, I think I'm going to write more poetry just so I can hear some more of those nice quips. Then again, I suppose I don't have to write ...