Trident

What I take it to be is the fact that there is all this great amount of space that separates us from anything else out there; space incomprehensible to the ...

That's great! Yeah, where is it getting published? You seemed to have that out in your excitement...

Hello Qamar, welcome to YWS! So you're from the United Arab Emirates? I didn't have to look that up or anything. ;) Have fun while you're here. 'Tis a good ...

The History Teacher by Billy Collins Don't have a link, sorry.

I wouldn't keep going back and forth between the poem's narrator and the bird. I would focus on the bird and then try to give it anthropomorphic characteristics. Some of ...

I'm reading a little sci-fi doozy called Otherland by Tad Williams. It's okay. I'm also reading Speculations which is an anthology of science fiction stories edited by Asimov. I'm in ...

Singapore, eh? (A little joke there. You see, you have "/Canada" and I thought it would be funny to... oh never mind) Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to ...

I carried a garter snake through the whitewashed town: it would hiss and flick its thin forked tongue through scaled lips to seduce me. “Don’t worry yourself; he cannot bite.” ...

Yes, this poem does seem like it would be much better read out loud. It does remind me of the coffee shop-type, jazzy rhyme sort that I might enjoy hearing. ...

Welcome to YWS! It really is a fun place. Do some critiques, post some work... voila! Fun. I'm glad you got into writing, I'm sure it helps pass the time ...

Welcome! I haven't gotten into Star Trek, alas, but I do enjoy many of the other science fiction-y shows out there if you're also a fan. Feel free to have ...

You're only eleven, so I didn't think it was that bad. The last poem I read was also about school. Perhaps you could expand into topics other than that? I ...

I'm afraid adding structure in this instance would be more like adding a $30 steak to a plateful of ketchup. Best, Trident

Incan, This is good, but I fear that Jonathan's continued dip into despair is causing this story to drag. I have told you my opinion about the story's beginning and ...

Lol, well I guess I should look at the forum it's in before I go correcting your dialogue. ^_^