Trident

I'm going to agree with most of what Writersdomain said. The switching of character POVs is okay, but in doing so, it has caused you to try and characterize too ...

Looking spiffy. Can't wait till next issue!

Hello Kylan. For science fiction, this feels right at home. The world-building was excellent. A few qualms: --There was too much description and not enough action. While describing environments can ...

8/10 B & W. Nice.

But what of her other lover?

They say that those whose lives have been so agonizingly taken from us at such a young age tend to linger just a bit longer to enjoy life’s simpler pleasures. ...

Welcome to YWS, theron guard. 'Tis is a great place to improve your writing.

Hi azure, I found this filled with nothing but purple prose. Adjectives can sometimes be your enemy when you use too many of them. I think that is the case ...

I must admit that I've never read them either. Not really because I heard bad things about him, but because I kind of grew out of fantasy a bit. I ...

Hi BrokenSword. I really do believe that short stories are the way to go if you want to get published. A collection at this point may be a stretch, but ...

um... Pat Buchanan? I don't really have another favorite writing site per se, but I frequent some forums and pick up tips here and there. This site is superior to ...

I never got the impression they were all maps, Jig. I wouldn't worry about it.

When you're younger (I would say younger than 17-18.), it's best to use a username. I would suggest never giving out your actual name. At first I thought this thread ...

Good luck Pros. I've heard Asimov's has a long turn over rate. A few months at the very least. Then again, most places are about that long.

"Grapes of Wrath" was pretty good, Cadmium. The ending... well, I suppose you'll see when you get there, but it was rather different.