Trident

I could ask someone I know who spent years in France immersed in stuff like this. I'll see what she comes up with.

Many thanks Mattster and Archae. I'm fully pleased you enjoyed it. It is meant to be a story that stands alone. But who knows? I think I have a nicely ...

Hi Shadowsun. Firstly, I adore the style. I will often employ the use of short sentences/fragments to create tension. Kudos. In modern military fiction, it is difficult to be innovative. ...

Hi Dreamer. Some style issues here. While the writing itself is pretty good, I find two distinct faults with this piece. The first is your use of fairy tale-like storytelling. ...

I've been trying more lately. I just finished finals today, so I should be doing more... but at home I have horribly slow dial-up, so that may not happen as ...

Ah, many thanks, Sam. I'm glad you liked it. I'll see what I can do with the things you mentioned; definitely worth looking at.

When most people think of Irish literature, they think of Joyce.

Hi, I just noticed one small thing you should probably have in your essay. A paper that talks about Irish authors should probably mention James Joyce. ;)

Some of the most powerful writing I've read can be scary for the reasons you have stated. There was nothing grotesque about it, but the writers presented the information to ...

Lowest population of all states! I'm pretty sure Wyoming has this distinction, but I could be wrong. I'm glad you have found time to post more, extrastapled. 8)

Nice! I seem to remember the title, but the premise of the story eludes me.

Welcome NAA. I'm glad you decided to speak up and join. YWS really is a great place to be. If you have any questions feel free to PM me or ...

Looking nice, Nate. I'll be sure to start writing up some stuff once finals are done.

Thanks for the critiques.

Hi sworddance. I like the characterization in this piece, and that section in the beginning (was that a letter?) was very well done. I have only one suggestion. This chapter ...