Trident

There's a big difference between writing with big words and writing smartly. I believe that this was written smartly.

This section: You thought that everything would end perfectly, didn’t you? You thought that I, Becca DuGrey, would end up “all right”, my heart stitched back together (“This time, the ...

I found nothing wrong with the lines with 'box' in them. I don't understand why everyone wants you to put them together or what that even means. Anyway... The rhythm ...

Hm. I wasn't a huge fan of the beginning. I thought you could perhaps set the scene a bit more before describing the boy. I have this tendency to dislike ...

Hey Magic, nice to see you around here still. All right. I recall critting I think it was the first chapter. On to the prologue: It felt somewhat mechanical. It ...

Hi Serena. I was pleasantly surprised, this being in the Romance fiction section and all. ;) Very nice characterization, especially for the main character, however, I felt that some of ...

Nice job! You two are perfect for the spot.

Mightily impressive, Brad. The voice fits well with the first person narrative; a wonderful job of characterizing. It's difficult to have such extensive narrative and then add the appropriate dialog, ...

I'll have to agree here that we could use a little context. The writing was fluid and interesting and I'm glad you didn't resort to too much background, however I ...

Awesome! At first I was thinking C as in the A, B, C, D, F scale and I was like "Oh no!" Nice work. I'd definitely be interested to see ...

Hello again. I've had a look through and I'm impressed. It looks as though you've thought about your storylines and ideas pretty thoroughly. I'd like to start off by saying ...

Nice to see we're being invaded as well. Welcome Hypocrit. You better live up to your name. ;)

These are some old 'new features'. ;)

Oh no! If the world tastes like strawberries, Fand is going to have a tough life!

All right, Clau, I've talked to her. She said that a fancy word that is used on recipe programs (I'm guessing she means television shows and the like) would be ...