Trident

Finally back! I got a wall post and couldn't see it until tonight, lol. Thanks Jenna, btw. And many thanks, Nate!

Ah, Candide. Yes, Voltaire really was on drugs. ^_^ When I read the title, I thought immediately of the lovely piece of satire. I've even thought about ending a piece ...

A bit purple in the beginning, but a lovely little piece nonetheless. The word 'it' in the fourth paragraph got on my nerves some. Perhaps a re-wording would do you ...

Lol, many thanks for the comments. I think I'm going to change the ending because the way I did it there was very abrupt as you said. The problem was ...

Thanks again for the critiques!

Ha, I'm in the middle of Dostoevsky's "The Idiot" right now, so this is comparably fast! I don't think there is anything wrong with the narrator in the first section. ...

I'm rather sorry that I don't really have the inclination to leave a detailed crit (IMP has captured some beautiful points). But I would like to leave a few comments. ...

You kick mountains; uppercut cyclones. You dance on dark clouds and saddle hurricanes, snatching their eyes from within. You drink up the ocean and sputter its salt into rusty spittoons. ...

Good luck! And have fun!

I like it much better. ^_^ You've got an intriguing way to describe it and it's different. I think it's improved greatly. Best of luck.

Number Three Okay, I agree that if you're going to have a link between these three, there should be something more apparent. If it is the same man (some of ...

We are three. Three are we. He and he attached to me. That is until the surgery. We are three. Three are we. Just one and one and one are ...

[This feels a bit of a dry skeleton at the moment. Hopefully that can be fixed. Advice and comments most appreciated.] “We are the merciful. We are the unwavering. Six ...

Many thanks for the comments all. I'll see if I can't get another part up within the next week or so.

Story One This has improved greatly since I last read this, Jiggity. Nicely done. This is very tightly written and the drag is at a minimum. I'm looking for barebones ...