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Point well taken. I think I'll have to work on some better images here. Boring?... I'll work on that. :) Thanks.

Not sure if I got the feeling of this poem to go across well. Please comment on that if you would. :D I stand at the deli counter and order ...

Lol, I must have been reading Shel Silverstein to my sister that day.

Happy Birthday!

Okay... this is my take on the poem. There are two relationships perhaps, but the narrator has found someone else and is now telling the other person that they are ...

Privyet back at you, Anushka. I'm sure you'll find many members here that flock to the new member who used Russian in her post. ^_^ Symbolism can be a wonderful ...

Sorry to take away the sunshine. I have no doubt I'll see your name somewhere. ^_^

DD, I believe the International Library of Poetry is connected to poetry.com, that odious vanity publisher. I'd stay away from it if I were you.

There's really nothing in this poem that hasn't been said a million times by lame songwriters. So why should we treat this poem as if it's different? Try some original ...

The rhyme scheme was more like a jingle than what your material suggests. It didn't appeal to me at all. I also think your lines are abstract. They don't give ...

Hi, I felt that you had very little, if any, imagery to work off of here. The poem may elicit feelings for you because you know what is behind these ...

Pat, of course.

I'll give this one a thorough crit, and read up to five and six, though those will come later. A bit of a slow start for action, I would think. ...

Ah, it's refreshing to read this one again. A cigarette dangled from the corner of Claude's mouth , [s]and[/s] its smoke curl ing in[s]to[/s] the air. It coalesc ed with ...

I'm glad you're doing some research, Clau. Shows the sign a good skeptic. There's so much that's complete fabrication these days that you almost can't believe anything. This chain mail ...