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Hello Kasidie. A very short and fairly effective poem. Perhaps you could expand this into something more bulky, and I'd really like to read it if longer. Since it is ...

Hi Clever! I read this twice, and came to the conclusion this poem is a short about heartbreak, not simply winter as the literal translation plays out. Am I right? ...

In the hazened glow of the blast rests a weary two. Lovers, that long ago would be at each other's throats, in a time that tongues were for making sense ...

Welcome to the YWS, ani. My name is Sean, and I'll be glad to review any pieces you may have to share with us lovely lot. Hope you like the ...

I read so many of these threads everyday. Concerns with MrMeanMustard's post: 1) Anonymous is not an organisation, nor a group. It is an idea. The idea of standing as ...

Hi Becki! First off, this is quite a relative story. One that is apparent and valid in everyday life, wherever you care to look. The step-by-step style isn't really my ...

Simple, repetitive rhythmic structure, and pretty effective. Although it's fairly short, I honestly don't mind too much, because it still has effect for what it's worth. Try using a colon ...

Thank you both. In response to you, DragonLADY (nice name, by the way), the word 'beck' is as I wrote, as a common short form of 'beckon', or in this ...

Although I like the content of the poem, I feel it do with being less fragmented at some points, perhaps to give it more structure. It feels rather randomly thrown ...

Exhausted, she rests against your chest, fickle muscles unaware of their own confusion. Beneath your weary composure lies the raging battle of breath against body, sense against delusion. The hand ...

Hi Lil_Pau, and a happy new year to you too. I think I'd best start by addressing the length, and overall nature of the poem. This feels like an excerpt ...

Hey Vern. This piece had quite a Larkin-esque feel to it, and although the grammar and use of punctuation is by no means perfect, overall I like the moral messages ...

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening, ladies and gents. (delete as appropriate.) My name is Sean, but for some unknown reason, most folks around these parts call me Elder. Although some of you may ...