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Thanks for the additional feedback. Warrior Princess - I have decided to remove those lines for those reasons. You were absolutely spot on. Thanks again. Does anyone think I could ...

I think I have it. It's a cocktail, called the Cimmerian Shade, made with Creme de Violette, sparkling red wine, rose essence, and grape syrup. Colourwise, it's a very, very ...

I feel it too, you know. The longing, a lust, that need to be 'human' the craving to be 'your man' . For however much you may wish my soul ...

A grain of sand, a drop of blood - the bindings of a world forsaken by the lost, taken by the wealthy, and broken by the word. Fallen brothers, of ...

Hey, if you find some spare time, could you please take a peek at this poem? Thanks! Really appreciate it. :) -Coral- Done!

Hi Perse! A very dark poem, and very intricate with details, although I have a few minor issues with the structure. The length of the lines makes it harder to ...

Hi Catri. First, punctuation at the end of the first stanza - it's not enjambement - it's just a mistake having nothing. I like that this is a faceless poem, ...

Hey! I was wondering if you could have a look at my prologue of my new novel! It's General Fiction, it's pretty short. Thanks. Done!

Hi Stela! Thanks for the link. First off, wow, that's a graphic opening paragraph (I just thought you were just underplaying it! xD). I like the tone you have used ...

Ooh cool :D it'd be just awesome if you could review my lil' poem for me :) Xxx Done!

Hello Emmzziee (I assume you're name is Emily, no?). I'm here like you asked :) First off, a very nice poem to read. The general consistency of the rhyming scheme ...

Howdy, y'all. I'm in a bit of a pickle, y'see. Some darn'd cayote done stole my boots, and Lethy won't sell me more til I get some points and reviews ...

When we hope for change, we never look to the rain for help. Yet it trickles down roofs, into gullies and on to leaves - promotes growth in plants, and ...

They say that words are the most powerful vice in the battle, the seige of a heart. Where the guardians form ranks and columns of thousands, a mere phrase can ...

Welcome to the YWS! I'm pretty much here 24-7 (not quite sure since I have only been here less than a week), and will be glad to review any new ...