Treyrant

This is a nice song. It is a little too formatted, however. Try changing it up a bit more with rhythm and your rhyme scheme. also Have you ever read ...

This is a nice rough draft but I have some important nit picks. Your transitional sentences are forced- try smoothing everything out to make it seem like they are doing ...

Hey! This is a really cool idea. I don't know many books that have this mouse-personification theme. It is a great attention catcher. I only have one nitpick because it ...