Torpid

I like it, -4 ph acid? It'd technically be 4ph acid. cause it goes from 1-14 but its GOOD! NICE! EXCELLENT! SWEET! MIGHTY FINE WORK! A! Has potential. You've earned ...

Good....but sad

The next day, Christopher awoke to a crashing metal on metal sound, echoing through the halls into Joker Squad's room. He sat up in his bed and glanced around. The ...

Thanks for the PM, Jigsaw, thanks everybody else who commented, i need more though. I'll do the next part soonish probably....Gooday. ~Torpid

Original and intrigieng (sp), interesting, kinda scary, abstract, has potential.

Yea you guys are right, i didn't put a lot of effort or descript into this story, its short, not my best, i had some spare time. It reminded me ...

I liked the description of the 'soldier's' thoughts and stuff. very good, nice picture and descript. I want more. Good ending/hook...Ever Onward Jigsaw. ~Torpid p.s. One o' Them War Stories ...

I revised the hexi outta that last installment and now im posting this so it recirculates as new, read it and tell me what u think of the BETTER version. ...

The human force of Capt. Malakai, Christopher McDermott, Jefferey Dore and a troop of marines managed to press back the invaders momentarily. But soon, the enemy recovered from the unexpected ...

Well, its definetly good, we all know that. Ever Onward, is this the only story your doing? ~Torpid

Well, please give all comments, any comments really, i rewrote most of it... Joker Squad descended through the scorched metallic catwalks at a frantic pase. Christopher was just behind his ...

Guys if u like this story then help cuz i dont know what comes next, i wanted to have an interesting encounter w/ some guy from the Leadslinger's past but ...

Well i wrote like a lot of freakin crap yesterday but this site expired or something and i lost it all so i guess i'll just be starting over....

good story, u kinda left us hangin but it was good and ure not hitting stops or slowing the story down so I give it a b, low a. Ever ...

Romien picked up the pack and looked at them, “Well, we might as well get started… we can handle a bit of heat can’t we?” He stepped into the desert ...