Torpid

uhhhm thats kinda odd, kinda weird. didnt pack a lot of action, or suspense, or humor but it was still purdy flippin sweet... not a masterpiece or anything but pretty ...

D Day, when the marines rolled up on the beach they were greated by lanes and signs the Army Corps of Engineers left there previously telling them which way to ...

Oh my gosh that was freakin awesome!!! Have you read the HP stuff? A few things were kinda off as far as storyline but it was definetly a really good ...

i agree with firestarter. i tihnk this was very good and would like to see more. the theme/idea of irish immigrants going to america during the famine is original, well ...

I dont know if anybodys said this but LOTR i would have to take instead of HP. HP is really good, in my opinion, but LOTR has contributed and inspired ...

Well, for a first draft, the grammar and spelling and punctuation looks good to me. But, it didn't grab my attention that much so I'd just say to work on ...

cool, i gotta drop some stories cuz i cant handle all of mine and sometimes, i just get such bad writers block that i wanna scrap the stroy, sometimes years ...

Honestly, i think it needs a lot of revision but i dont know anyone in their right minds who would revise that HUMONGO story so i guess thats up to ...

Well, it was definetly a cool subject and has potential but i'd say a little revision and slight editing would do it good. Spaces in the writing, sentence structure, and ...

The first part flowed really well, i wasn't noticing that i was reading so much. ure good. Is the Great Muse like GOD? Dunno if i like that but it ...

Its still flippin tubularly awesome BUT why was the Shadow's muscles straining so hard to catch up with some lil kid steps AND i think if it keeps roaring and ...

i was grinning the whole time Dargquon Ql'deleodna was explaining Salvatore to Phoenix. Cuz i knew that Phoenix already knew all that stuff. I agree though, Salvatore is a very, ...

is this the part where there's a huge bang of blinding golden light and the child is gone, where it was standing there is now an angel clad in flaming ...

That's very good, reminds me of that movie Elektra w/ the guy w/ the eagle on his chest. I will come back to read more. Didn't spot any errors and ...

You dont happen to read R.A. Salvatore's Drizzt books do you, the elf's whirling blades against the orcs (in the earlier parts) reminded me of it. This is good, a ...