ToritheMonster

This is quite good! You used some nice imagery, which I always appreciate. It was raw and heartfelt, almost verging on cliche. You didn't cross that line, though, so nice ...

Tom: a ghost, so long as my aunt don't catch me. In a land made of marshmallows, what would you do?

My enemies are at my mercy.

sounds like a cheesy teenage romance, involving two star-crossed loves in winter. "Trials of Death"

Take what life throws at you. Unless it hits your head and you die. Don't knock on death's door. Ring the doorbell and run; he hates that. (that one isn't ...

brouhaha pronounced: brew-ha-ha

fail whoops. That's been used, hasn't it. Whatevs.

Orpheus

Banned for saying that poor Bolt's avvie is weird.

I enjoyed this, and can't wait to read more. However, I'd like to know a bit more about your characters. Where do they live? What, if anything caused the MC ...

I liked this very much, but it had some issues. Firstly, you often forget a period: "Come..come" should be "Come... come." I also think it would be nicer if you ...

Well... I see what you were trying to accomplish in these. Truly funny limericks are incredibly hard to write, so props to you for trying. However, you humour came off ...

Haha thanks. Sorry, originally every word was misspelled. Day was spelled dsy, pink was spelled pnk.... you get the idea. Sorry I didn't catch them all. O-o

Yeah... please, tell your friends about this, you guys.

We should have one final showdown, the Surviving Riders v. the Shadows near the end. I totally agree, we should have a sequel