ToritheMonster

Well, this poem shows promise, but needs more to it. I don't have time for an in-depth review, but here's what I suggest: work on rhyming. In the very beginning, ...

I agree with Elinor and Bondgirl. You don't want to do two things in poetry: whine and repeat yourself. After you said "The things" four times, I sort of lost ...

Heya! Alright, this wasn't a bad poem... but it certainly wasn't winning material. Here's why: -Some phrases made no sense. For example: "Enlightened by their young ones’ smiles." Birds cannot ...

*Okay, I fixed it. But you do know that Reitsprea really is dead, right?* Oh... so dragons die when their Riders die, but not vice versa? Let's just pretend that ...

Harry Potter! A fan! Yay! Questions for you: 1. Draco or Harry 2. What's your favorite house? 3. Favorite teacher? 4. Fred or George? *skips around whistling theme song*

I agree with the other posters. This poem makes no sense and is incoherent. It shows promise, and seem like the skeleton of something bigger... I suggest you do a ...

Eighth- The man was furious. I smirked. Would he really try to attack me? "Your dragon's condition isn't important as of now. Suffice it to say that while you're alive, ...

*actually, the 8 is on his forehead. she also decided it would be fun to just cut his hand to make him talk. no 8 on his hand*

Wow! This was incredibly good. Your meter was lawless, your rhyming well thought out. You have a lot of poetry talent. One tiny nitpick: The sea gulls fade into the ...

I agree. This poem really has no meaning... it seems to just be a jumble of rhyming questions. That said, this is your first poem. Most people can't rhyme at ...

Hey, I'm Dreamy, and I'll be reviewing your poem today. Let's start with nitpicks, in red . Love . Your name I hear, Everywhere I turn. (This part doesn't make ...

haha. Do the Riders even have a battle plan?

Eighth- I entered the tower, where the Storm Rider immediately hissed at me. "Come and take me. Too bad I'll never tell you anything," she spat. I smiled. "Don't worry, ...

Eighth is headed towards the castle, ready to torture. Brace yourselves XD.

Eighth- I found a medic, a feeble old woman, who dressed my wounds with shaky hands. I glared at her the entire time, making her quiver even more. She happened ...