ToritheMonster

Still Tori. Still want death by a knife in the back or being stabbed with scissors. :) I'm laughing over here. Ahhhhhhh. Life.

cool thanks, ill review yours later

Thanks! :mrgreen:

Thanks, everyone! :mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen:

Nice poem. It really captured how lost some people feel to themselves, when it seems nobody knows just who they are under the surface. This was really pretty, in a ...

Huh. At first I was really confused as to what you meant by this poem, but I understand it now. I agree with Vai, expand it a bit more. Clarify ...

Well, this poem made me sad. Good job, a nice poem usually invokes emotion. You wrote this beautifully, expressing exactly how some people feel: life is hard for a teenager, ...

Hey! As a lover of haikus, I can say that this was awesome. It's often really hard to capture a pretty inamge in three short lines, but you really did. ...

Hey! Sorry, but I really have to agree with everyone else. Ticker tape just isn't for you. But you obviously have talent in there! Use it for a different style. ...

I agree with Ben. Also, you misspelled your title--you added an extra 'L'. You might want to fix your meter on the last line, and add a comma after 'watermelon'. ...

This was really cool. My only issue was your rhyming. Was it supposed to rhyme? Because it didn't, really. If it wasn't, then the beginning of your phrases need a ...

That was really pretty. It was sad and sweet at the same time, just how I like poems!Man, I usually correct people on their grammar and punctuation, but you were ...

That was really pretty. I love your rhyming, you're really good with keeping the meter straight, and it's nice to not have to correct you on that. Actually, I think ...

That was amazing! Your rhyming meter was flawless. I also loved your wording! it was really deep and meaningful. I love short poems that say a lot, and you really ...

Awesome job! I don't mean to sound like a jerk, but you reallllly captured how I feel about lots of the kids in my school. I think everyone else caught ...