ToritheMonster

Well, I don't quite agree with Ben (sorry Ben) but I do agree with everyone else. Add some imagery! This also just seemed cold, and flat to me. Round it ...

Ah. Cynical-mindedness. I actually liked this, even though it wasn't very well-written. You need to fix your punctuation, and your last line is completely off-meter. I, just personally, think it's ...

She noticed how quiet it was. No thunder rolled from the ominous dark clouds in the sky, and nobody talked or laughed. Her ears buzzed, as ears do in complete ...

Ummm... I'm sorry? Just trying to give some constructive criticism, which you would do well to accept."Do unto others as you would do unto yourself." How would you feel if ...

Chicken Fries? Those sound good. Sorry. I get off-track easily. Nice poem! It was pretty, I liked you imagery and metaphores. You need to work on your sentences, though. You ...

I agree, this was really pretty. You certainly do Have Your Words (pardon the pun), and you sure know how to use them. Bittersweet, and that's how I like my ...

Hey! I liked this too! It had a foreign tint to it, and it was fiery like I think you intended it to be. Your imagery was good too.This was ...

I gotta agree with lilldeh. I didn't like the message either.I also felt mildly offended. That said, some of the best works of art are offensive to some-- this isn't ...

I chuckled as well. *chuckles more* Nice little poem. Good way to vent anger!Hm. That's probably a bit more effective than yelling at people. Write poetry about them... Nice job.For ...

This was absolutely beautiful!It made me happy, and I really wanted to be in that place you were describing. Your imagery was magnificent,your meter lovely. Hm. I probably sound like ...

Hey! I'm here to review. But sorry, I'm going to have to be harsh like Miss Mizz. This sounded like you grabbed as many big words as you could find ...

You has meaning? Sorry, that line made me laugh. You definitely want to fix that. However, I really liked this poem! I loved how you sort of referred to the ...

I totally agree with S.S. Rose. While this poem has tons of potential, it needs tons of work. First, you had no imagery. While poems don't always need this, you ...

Tee hee. This was great. My only issue? Why are you going to bed at six in the morning? Or have you not been able to go to bed all ...

I totally agree with Classy. You have a lot of talent, but you need to (and I quote my English teacher) "juice it up." Add some information, some good descriptions, ...