ToritheMonster

Hey, I agree with Bondgirl. But, you did say you were gonna un-cliche things, so maybe... I dunno. Either way, You might want to at least touch up on your ...

This was absolutely amazing! Your characters were perfectly rounded, and I felt like I really knew Vera and Evi by the end. They seemed so real! Your descriptions were nice ...

Thankee!

Hey, I'm Dreamy, and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, welcome to YWS! This was a nice poem. Your main problem was punctuation.just look it over, and you'll ...

Hey! Alright, I'm not big on romance, but this was cute. My favorite part was your description of the beach and sunset in the beginning. It was very real, to ...

Hey, Dreamy here, and welcome to YWS! As you can probably see from all those other lengthy reviews, this needs a lot of work. I don't mean to be harsh, ...

Hey guys-- I haven't gotten many reviews on any of my last few parts-- so I'm assuming you guys are getting bored of my story. I think I'll just make ...

This was really cool! I didn't know you could get so much out of an empty jar, but you definitely showed how to. I also liked how you changed your ...

Ha. Thanks, but I'll learn it for free in school. ;) Can't wait to do a real review of the English part! --Dreamy

To Kate: That's cool , I didn't realize that. Didn't mean to offend or anything. So, bookgeek, could you post this in English as well? That way you can get ...

Thankee!

Thanks!

Yay! It's featured again! Thanks, whoever liked this!

Aw! This isn't a featured work anymore. If anyone wants to like it.....

Come on! just one measly review!