Torigirl15

thank you! i'm always looking for new websites to check, and yes, i really did a lot of research for this story... i've checked out a lot of books, and ...

This was amazing. The imagery was great, and i can't think of anything else to say about it other than it is amazing.

Good, except for a lot of run on sentances. You need to keep an eye on that! =)

more explaining... x.x and i do need to change a couple of things, but im not sure how to yet, so i left it as is. When I woke up ...

the strawberry banana sobe is a joke between me and my friend, i don't know if im actually going to use it. =) and i really don't know if i ...

I really like this! you should definitly post more! i was confused about the shape shifters, fairies, vampires and humans, but i'm sure that the reason why they are fighting ...

edited a few parts, mainly the very end, and the part that brassnbridle pointed out. =)

haha yes, i did mean it as a figure of speech... sorry if it was confusing.

hahah yes, my character does fall down a lot... i was having a hard time trying to figure out ending for certain... "scenes" while i was writing. And i often ...

this is my edited chapters 1 and 2, plus i added a prologue... hope its better than the last one i posted. Prologue The silence was more than I could ...

I really like this chapter because it really shows that these characters have history together! that's alway something i look for, that relationships need to have backbone to them. I ...

Really good. I liked the emotion in it. Could have started out a little better, but i think that this was an amazing heartwarming story nonetheless. sad that this is ...

I enjoyed reading this chapter, but i think this is a lot like harry potter for at least three reasons. 1. The train. 2. The fact that they start magice ...

now i'm really confused as to what is going on... maybe i will wait for the next chapter before critiqueing.

This is kinda long, so hopefully its not boring. x.x Chapter 4-The Door I Stupidly Choose To Open I stretched and yawned, keeping my eyes closed, hoping that the whole ...