Torigirl15

I really liked this piece of writing, but i would vary the word choice a little. You use the word "road" a little much, and i would try to spice ...

This was really really good!! I loved it! I like the way you combined two fairy tales, and made Draco a vampire. The only critique I have is in these ...

Please tell me what you think, looking for advice about whether it's good enough to continue. I'll be sure to return the comments. Thanks. Also, I don't really know what ...

I found this confusing. I got the fact that the mc in the poem was using drugs, but the dialogue didn't really flow. It didn't fit with the rest of ...

This prologue reminds me of Romeo and Juliet. It doesn't sound very original, to be frank, and i don't think this is a story i would particularly want to read ...

Hi! hopefully this review helps you. I liked this story even if it was very short, and didn't have a lot of description in it. I was a little confused ...

Thanks for the reviews!! i just wanted to let some people know that this was the very first section of a story me and my friend are writing together... this ...

First of all, i just want to say, this was a really well written. my only major problem with it was that pandora didn't open a box... it was really ...

This is just something random me and my friend are working on. My part is Alzina, and his is Abraxas... this is really short, but i hope you like it! ...

i'm big into greek mythology, so i really enjoyed this story. The thing was, that Pandora was not only created to open the box to get revenge, she was married ...

First of all, this is in third person, not first. hear her all Victoria for help this line didn't make sense... maybe you were trying to say "hear her call ...

There were quite a few spelling mistakes... make sure you proof read your work. Also, this sounds a lot like twilight. I know that you haven't said that it was ...

This was a very good chapter, other than the fact that you don't really describe much. How could a young boy survive alone in an ally way for three days, ...

Even if this wasn't the second half of a chapter, it is not too short. i've read books that have chapters that only have a few sentances in them. Its ...

I'm noticing a pattern of awesomeness as i read your work. XD i think your an amazing writer! This is exactly the type of story i enjoy reading, but i ...