Torigirl15

Oh, i loved this! it was amazing! A couple paragraphs though you need to work on flow, but other than that i liked it! pm when you write more. Also, ...

I liked this story, and i want to know what's going happen next! i'm not really into spiderman, but my brother is, and he would eat this story up. =p ...

i liked this, but i have to say that the way you described Eric is a little... done before. What i mean by that is, it seems like he's your ...

Never mind, i take back the part of my other review where i said i didn't know how your mc woke up. =) One thing i would change is the ...

i really liked your idea and where you're taking the story. one of my problems was that i didn't understand exactly when the mc woke up from the dream. It ...

i agree with the other two comments in that it was a little confusing, but it drew me in like it was supposed to! Good work!

i think you have a really good idea going. here are a few grammatical errors you had... they didn't tell is that it Did you intend to put "they didn't ...

I really liked this writing, but the beginning was very confusing. i couldn't understand who was who, and what half the things they were talking about meant, so maybe try ...

I loved this! The descriptions of the characters are amazing, and the play was hilarious! The ending made me laugh, although, i don't understand exactly how "Daisy" get's out of ...

I loved the way you made the scarecrow the good guy instead of the villain as many writers might do. It added a different feel to the writing, and i ...

This is yet another beginning to the book i hope to write, and yes i know this sucks. So please comment, and help me fix it up in anyway you ...

I loved this post, and i think it had some really good points. Anyone who gets mad over this obviously doesn't get the point. =D

Okay, so i have been trying out a few different beginnings to my book, since i have had writers block for the past few weeks. Hopefully this will get me ...

i really enjoyed the oddity of this piece, it was creepy, and made me want to read more. the only thing that sort of confused me was the last paragraph. ...

I really loved this story. You described the main character's feelings in a way that everyone can relate to. Some stories make break up scenes too dramatic, and the reader ...