Torigirl15

i thought it was pretty good, but i would have just gotton rid of the rhyme scheme because it makes it sound too classic. like some other ppl have said, ...

this was a very choppy poem, and i thought it should have had a little more flow to it. I liked the idea behind it though, and maybe if you ...

you had a decent plot going, but i was confused about what was going on with the whole switch thing. i think you should explain better why everyone thinks isabelle ...

this is good, but i was confused about whether it was supposed to rhyme or not. the begginning didn't rhyme, but the end didn't, and neither did parts of the ...

this is a really good story! i enjoyed it, and you should enter it into some type of contest! i was a little confused about what this word was though ...

i didn't get the meaning of the point five at the end of the poem, or maybe im just being dense. i enjoyed reading the poem, it has good flow, ...

this is good, except you changed tense once or twice. also, maybe you could discribe the scene the characters are in better, like showing how the room looks. other than ...

if anyone has any suggustion of wht i could name this, i would appreciate it! =) hahaha Chapter Three- Confuse the Crap out of Iris Day We almost made it ...

and i totally hate these first two chapters, so thank you very much for saying how i can make them better. =)

hey, yeah, i don't have a title for it yet, so that's just what i have it saved under on my computer. =)

thought it was really good! needed a little work on the flow, maybe changing the choice of word in a couple places... have you tried reading it out loud? =) ...

i really liked it! it drew me in right away, and i wanted to read more after i finished the last sentace.i was kind of confused about what kind of ...

i thought it was good, but needed work. you repeated yourself several times, and it was sort of confusing how all of a sudden there is a horrible storm, even ...

this is the first two chapters, so if your confused about anything hopefully it will be explained in later chapters! =p Chapter One-Small Town Life Life isn’t supposed to be ...

i liked the last sentace, maybe have a follow up poem about how your going to over throw the sorrow. =)