TinyDancer

For those of you who don't know, I might be starting a novel! (eek!) Here are a few starting paragraphs to ponder. Message me or comment if you like them ...

This was beautiful :) I fell in love with the poetic voice and you conveyed the emotion perfectly and effortlessly. Great job :) ~Jess

Ok, so here's the thing- You have talent. I saw it in the other piece of yours that I reviewed :) I was ok with this piece. I'm not a ...

This was really sweet and I loved the abruptness of it. You aesthetically managed to be assertive and tender at the same time. The flow was nice although I think ...

This is such a sweet concept, and you really nailed it. The spacing was a bit off, yes, but I still enjoyed the content! You have a good sense of ...

Very moving. I like how the reader is taken through a vast array of beautiful imagery until the final main point that explains what the imagery was trying to convey. ...

Inhale...exhale. Beat. She pushed open the door. It squealed on its hinges a bit as it made its slow journey inward. She was hit with the smell of clean, wooden ...

This was lovely and uplifting to read. Quite hopeful too. I only noticed one spelling error- "Knifes" should be "knives" but that's it! Other than that, it was gorgeous and ...

Thanks for the review! I will get right on those corrections. I agree with all of them! Thanks so much! ~Jess

This is really cute, and I liked the flow of events. You said you were dyslexic so you did relly well despite that! I think you could've used more imagery ...

Hey there- Gorgeous imagery and voice. You have a friendly, but authoritative tone and I loved all the examples and pictures you gave. Very personal and I can tell that ...

His voice lay in her mind like a bedded lover. She'd been overanalyzing every word he'd said today, each time uncovering more hidden emotions. Pacing the floor for the millionth ...

Wow. You never cease to amaze me with your gut-wrenching talent. Your words are real and relatable and just altogether beautiful, even though the subject you're writing about in this ...

Hey there! This is a really insightful piece. Great job if it really is your first one! I like the repeating of the question throughout. I did run into a ...

Thanks xhellysmx! I had the most trouble with that line and I tried to put it many different ways, but I kind of like how it is, and I think ...