TinyDancer

Hey there, me again! This was great, but I liked Envy more ;) There were just a few grammar mistakes but I really liked the ending. One thing that I ...

Lovely poem. So true! I've seen it happen so many times. There's not much more to say than what others above me have already said (other than I'm glad that ...

This was horrifically, saddeningly true. What a piece. Great job capturing the sensory images and emotion of the scenario. This was inspiring and touching, even though the end was sad. ...

Wait!!!! Don't get rid of the bird story. I thought Harris was supposed to be Kelly and the little ants that ate Kelly were supposed to be like that woman ...

This was perfectly disturbing. I love it. Nice use of imagery and flow. The rhythm was superb and not forced at all. You didn't have any grammar mistakes. It was ...

Oh, and as for the title, I like Suddenly. But if you were going for something a bit more symbolic, maybe something like Candles and Rain, just because those were ...

This was lovely. I really felt the emotions you were trying to convey. These people were realistic and thus likeable. There were a few grammatical errors here and there, but ...

This was so sweet! I like the uplifting message. Its really awesome that you were able to complete this in 15 minutes! Great job! I don't really see any mistakes ...

Do you hear that? It's everywhere. Listen...silence. All the things left unspoken voice themselves here. Silence is where wishes dwell, where love blossoms, where the deepest passions of the heart ...

Super cute poem :) it makes me think of a certain bedtime story that my mother used to read me when I was little. Don't ask me why, it just ...

Hey there- I love this :) (as usual haha) I was expecting her to wake up next to Jonah and was sad that she didn't, but I know the effect ...

This was good. Great concept, and you displayed your stanzas well. I felt a little detached emotionally though (until the last stanza). Maybe you could put some more emotional words ...

Hey there, me again! I can't seem to stay away from your pieces :) Once I grasped the concept of what this piece was about, I read it again with ...

Hey- Great post. I though it was really cute and charming. I can't help but feel as though you could take this farther :) All of the grammar and spelling ...

Thank you! I'm in the experimental stage for now (fancy way of saying I can't commit to any ideas yet), but I will definitely keep posting appetizers. Probably will be ...