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Re: Pokemon Ultimate Evolution: Episode 6, Lasting happiness.
Very humanized Pokémons here. Being a HUUUUUUUUUUUUGE Pokémon fan myself, I can certainly compare your style to Mystery Dungeon. Emotive. lots of feelings put in your story there, and they ...
Jun 12, 2013 -
Re: Fantasy Land: The Storm-Light Shards.
As Giniara Pointed out, too many "but", especially at the beginning. I like the way you describe everything, but there is a lack of details sometimes: the character don't seem ...
Jun 12, 2013 -
Re: 'Locked Up In Hell'(Title will be revised)-Prologue
Wow. I enjoyed this. First of all, I think you should use other vareties of words (that only applies for the beginning), such as the repetition of the word "children". ...
Jun 12, 2013