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Re: Lyrria; The Beginning- The Dream
I tend to nitpick...but here you go! She couldn’t see anything, but the darkness of the forest. I don't think you need a comma before "but". She froze in the ...
Oct 31, 2008 -
Re: A Dreamer's Eyes - Ch. 1
Really great piece! I love how you are showing the depth and complexity of their culture right off the bat. You can always do more research. For example, you are ...
Oct 30, 2008 -
Re: Dont Follow Me
This was quite a bit different than I expected. I loved it! I have to say, we ALL have room to improve. For example, I thought that line (as said ...
Oct 30, 2008