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Chapter three - Investigation The next afternoon, I woke up in the same bed to find that the I.V. had been removed and that I had been invigorated with new ...

Part number three! Enjoy ^-^ Chapter two - Discoveries Bang...bang... bang! "Wake up girl!" I gasp when I hear the sound of the demon that had captured me bang on ...

Wow, Tifa! These are really good. I like your style. It's very pretty, and I love how you are able to use so many colors. I would recommend adding some ...

Ok, it moved extremely quick again. For instance, the dream was ok but when she went to go outside to throw up, it was kind of like it skipped something. ...

It's really good but the flow of it moves a little quick. To me, it kind of jumped around though it was good in description. There were a few things ...

Ok, so these are some older pictures that I have drawn, I haven't scanned any new ones as of late so tell me what you think!! Ok, so this is ...

They was four dollars and seventeen cents. Ok, it was an amazing story but the only thing that irritates the crap out of me is 'they'. It should be 'there'. ...

I have an idea of the metaphor. I've thought it over and I think, is it someone getting older and older as they live then finally death calls them and ...

I liked it, it was a good short story but I confused myself while I read it lol. Was it only the girl narrating or was it both her and ...

That was a good poem. ^-^ I think it was fairly well written be there could be some adjustments. Meep, other than that I don't think you should change anything ...

That was an excellent article. Lol, I had a brainfart of geniusness...but... not for the story that I'm writing. Lol but when I finish my story about Miko and Kyrin, ...

Thank you both for your critism, I really needed it. Lol, I hate critism because it makes me irate but I really do appreciate it. I'll start revising tonight and ...

I love it because it was real love that both they experienced but it was sad because they were so different and could never be together in the end. It's ...

Ok, I know it kind of goes quick but I'm in the process of editing that. I just wanted to post a less edited version to get the feeling of ...

Here are the revised version of Chapter one! Chapter one - A Beginning Kiba panted happily next to me as we ran the rest of the way to the market. ...