Tick_Tock

Thank you for your review I am grateful I like what you've done with the poem, it's nice to see another perspective. But the only thing I would say is ...

I see a girl staring at me From her eyes stream tears I reach out to comfort But she reaches to block Her eyes are pleading I see she wants ...

I think there is a lot of raw talent here, some mistakes to be changed and perhaps modifying some of the words and phrases but overall I think it is ...

OK I seem to be disagreeing with everyone but I think it worked, yes it could do with a little work here and there but doesn't everything. I myself like ...