TheseStoneWalls

Hey! Earlier today, I noticed I was struggling a lot with trying to write and edit the story I've been working on, and so I put on some music just ...

(Chapter four. I'm unsure about the start of this chapter--I feel as if it introduces Damon as a character exactly the way that I want to portray him, but it ...

(Hey. Just wanted to let you know that this is a very tentative first draft. My big concern is all the gaps it leaves in what the story is going ...

Hey there! :) I'm happy to review your work. What i'm going to do is re-print your story, and I'll list my specific comments in parentheses as we go, and ...

Heyyy there, Libby. :) Thanks for reading Soulless...Just hope I can help you out a bit with this! For starters, I'm going to go through and just fix grammatical errors ...

I like lists. We'll go with a list. :) 1. Again, I enjoy your vocabulary. It makes your piece more interesting. 2. Proofread, and know your commas. Here, I'll fix ...

Probably the first thing that stuck out to me about this piece was its length. If it's a chapter, it should really take up at least two least in my ...

(Third chapter...I'm kind of just waiting for someone to come through and rip this to shreds. I think it needs a lot of work, so the more advice I can ...

Hey! I'm kind of new to both the forum and the site, and I'd love to read some of what others have written. :) I'm not all that experienced with ...

(Okay, so this got totally edited. The entire scene with Nat changed, and while it fits a lot more with her character as well as J's character, I'm not totally ...

Thanks, Romance and Dover for the reviews. :) My one big concern with this piece is that it's setting up a story I don't want to tell...But I guess I'll ...

Being a "true" hero requires sacrifice--It involves the willingness to give up something that benefits you in order to attain something that benefits someone else, especially the world as a ...

Hey! I wanted to thank you for the review on Soulless, and also to say I really like what you did with this story. It's creepy in a very direct ...

(Okay, so this got edited a bit. There's some pretty important clues about what's going to happen in the rest of the novel that I'd simply skipped over before...Because of ...