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  • Other » General, General Re: Harmony

    Hey! :) First off, welcome to YWS! Hope you'll like it here :D I'm Truth and I shall be your reviewer today :) --If you haven't yet noticed, I love ...

    Feb 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Thank You, Dear

    Hey! So, I'm pretty sure Kafka pointed it all out for the corrections I would suggest. So I'll leave you with this: Here there's nothing capitalized at all, and it's ...

    Feb 2, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Inocence As We Know It Chapter One: Material Girl

    Hello there :) I'm Truth, here for a full review on your novel! Let's start, shall we? PS: Don't be intimidated by all the red, it's all small things that ...

    Feb 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The tortential spam that is my poetry.

    Whoa lots of posts! Haha, I shall review :D Let's start with Said Disease , shall we? I think if my cheeks were slit, and handcuffs locked inside, hooking my ...

    Feb 1, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Imo: Split Personality Chp 1

    Hey Dudette :) Truth here to review! So first off, I would like to point out how you are narrating in past tense, and keeping it quite constant... This one, ...

    Jan 31, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Piece Of Perfection

    Ok, not my strongest piece but had a lot of writers block. Plus I dont know if you count this as romantic or not. Anyway hope you enjoy! :) Everyone ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Recoil

    Hello Storygirl :) I'm Truth and I shall review your poem! My famous last words were in the witching hour, too scared too speak , comma I sat back. With ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: A Journey - Part 1: Memory ~~(Chapter 2)~~

    Hello there :) Truth here for a review! Let's start with the nitpicking, shall we? Numbers on both sides were dwindling fast as the battle raged on. It wouldn't be ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Brothers of Arms

    Hello :) Truth here for a review! A grain of sand, a drop of blood - the bindings of a world forsaken by the lost, taken by the wealthy, and ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Tomorrow, yesterday, but never today

    Hello :) Truth here for a review! So first, I must say that this is really good for a first draft. I miss what once had been, crave what will ...

    Jan 28, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Scarlet Rain 1.2

    Hello Dragon :) Truth here to review! This looks very promising, I like. I would only like to point out that you use a period to seperate your narration from ...

    Jan 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: the angel nobody appreciated

    Hello there :) I'm Truth, here for a review. the angel nobody appreciated, sits alone in the park, Since the rest is in present tense, I would recommend staying with ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Through the tree's

    Hello :) Truth here, nice to meet you. Alright, onto the review... Your off-pitch laugh carried itself through the dying and decaying trees. This was paradise. A dead forgotten place, ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Try To Escape Chapter 1

    Hey :) Truth here for a review! First off... The verb tenses is changing are changing quite a bit in there... red= present, blue= past My feet hit the pavement ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Begin Your Betrayal

    Here lies the tale, Of a girl long ago, Rest in pieces , comma young lady, It ' s payment you owe. Young girl of nineteen, Only daughter of three, ...

    Jan 23, 2011


You know what the big problem is in telling fantasy and reality apart? They're both ridiculous.
— The 12th Doctor