TheShattering

Okay, thank you for your feedback, it's my first flash fiction. I will definitely make those changes, i see what you mean, now that i reread it i feel like ...

Yes it was, the effects of death. Thank you for your feedback :]

thanks, your review helped! :]

Really good, i don't normally read poetry but this is really good. Love the imagery, just the fact that its dark and depressing and that you totally OWNED it. Good ...

Tears streamed down my face. The grains in the asphalt dug into my knees. I gripped my head and rocked back and forth. She lay in front of me, her ...