TheEvilWithin

Hi everyone! I joined a few days ago. I had no idea this welcome area existed until now. So far I have found everyone to be polite, which is quite ...

As the sun set into the horizon and the waves flapped gently against the side of the dock, I don't like this. It's setting a pretty big scene, but the ...

Nice idea you have here. I quite liked this scene. I wasn't actually going to post because I didn't have anything specific I wanted to say, but then I found ...

Hello ^_^ Any criticism is much appreciated! Evil _____ Chapter One (four years later) The loud buzz jolted Darren awake. He sat up in alarm, his ears pricked and the ...

It was very thought-provoking, but the overuse of the word colors lessened my enjoyment somewhat. Anyway, nice poem. Evil

Very very nice. It was cool to read a story set in England, where I live. I could totally tell right away, too. Also, I live next to an Oceana, ...

Slowly I sat up, Poor way to start, it's the horrible ly word "slowly". holding my aching head. I felt as though it had been slammed against a rock twenty ...

Haha yeah. I love it when things change, too, but I'm also a little OCD about it. (^_^) I like to know how long what I'm writing is going to ...

Okay,I didn't want to be selfish and post my story without reviewing others, so here goes. I'm bad at reviewing work that isn't mine, but I'll give it a go. ...

I drastically changed the prologue so that I could incorporate your ideas into it. Thanks for your help, and let me know if this one sucks too. xD That's if ...

That sounds crazy. I can never estimate how long my novels or scenes will be, because most of the time they change half way through. Sometimes my characters suddenly do ...

Thanks for the help, everyone. I have a clearer idea of what I want to do now. Suzanne, that makes a whole lot of sense. I will try writing from ...

I'm having huge problems with my sci-fi story. It's the beginning. I have rewritten it hundreds of times, but nothing seems to work the way I want it to, mostly ...

Here is what I think a villain should be like. 1: They should speak like a villain. They should scare you with their words, and reveal how bad they are ...

I once read a book which had telepathic thoughts like this. --Hello, I'm talking to you telepathically. I think that's the best way. (normal thoughts were just in italics)