TheEvilWithin

I wont lie, of course it was a boy. It's obvious when you think about it, because he says "hanging out" and doesn't seem like a girl (well he clearly ...

Chapter One: I often find myself wondering how one persons life can go on and yet another persons can't. Is it really fair that Annie died before she had a ...

Prologue: The door creaked open and Annie tiptoed across the floor. She began poking my arm trying to wake me up, even though I was already awake. The first sentence ...

Hello, Evil here. I'll be reviewing you again. Lauren hopped I am always taken out of the story when I read the word 'hopped' in this context. People don't actually ...

Thanks Yuri, I found your comments most helpful. I'm going to rework it so it isn't so tell-y. Not too much, mind. I think that because it's so basic, it ...

It's uber short so you will make light work of it (unless it's really bad and you need to berate me with a massive wall of text). Thanks in advance! ...

Thanks Angel, I found your comments most helpful, and I will use them when I go back to edit. In the future I will try to be more consistent when ...

I rated this 18 because there are a few references to sex, even though they are quite vague. Author's note: I didn't describe the MC on purpose. I would prefer ...

Thanks for your great review, it helped a lot! I want to talk to you about why I didn't give any information concerning Darren's and Jase's back stories. I have ...

For hours, nothing but the scratching of pencil on paper could be heard. He drew slowly, tracing the image in his head and then afterwards shading the appropriate areas. He ...

Thanks for the review! I agreed with everything you said, and will alter my story accordingly. I wouldn't mind if you took a look at chapter one, because you're very ...

Also, don't send them messages asking if they are still going to do it. Just be patient. That used to happen to me on other forums.

I would love it if you could review this. Thanks in advance! ^_^

Hello, Evil here! I will be reviewing your work today. ^_^ Megan Walsh balanced her Prada tote on her arm while she flipped open her cell phone. I didn't know ...

Please review my story, I will give you all of my points in return. ^_^