TheEstimableEelz

Just from reading, this seems very good. Now to analyze and critique... Love the parallelism throughout - very tight, keeps a focus and the reader's attention. The rhyme I'm ambivalent ...

YWS is nice, I suppose. If only it was more full of the college crowd...

The Sky Is Serene The space whale is a majestic narwhal, shorn of its horn, a peaceful creature. The sky is but its playground, a kiddie pool of atmosphere. Sky ...

Other. My poems, perhaps my stories too are of an irrational bend that confuses genre because they ignore it.

Firstly, I must agree entirely with the previous poster. The quick lines gave this a song-like feel, to me; I was humming it at times while reading. The imagery has ...

If you would be so kind.

A great story told! Now, the poem itself I shall perhaps be crueler towards. While the pacing kept everything nice and tight, I was disconcerted by the extremely short lines. ...

Amazing. Great use of free verse, enjambment, etc. The poem tells a great (hi)story, of what was back in your '98; I felt as though I was there watching. Third-to-last ...

A nice poem, and one I enjoyed reading. The only thing that bothered me was the leaning tower of Pisa. It was not set up at all and felt terribly ...

Deva Diana Arlecchina Watery moon, a-waxing (soft in) the bright waning sky — will you erupt in ruby ablaze torching the stars, or watch in pale livery aloof? Affection none ...

Musings Apropos of Calculus Oh, whose empathy may be unbounded along the path I chose to travel constantly in loop resistance (an idyllic symbolism) of the living autumn (still another) ...

Not my usual cup of tea. However, I ended up reading and liking it. As to what the first reviewer said, I agree that rhyme shouldn't be forced.. but the ...

Nice, reminds me of some of my own writing. Granted, your spontaneity seems to be at a higher level than mine. Anyway... I have nothing negative to say about this, ...

Nice poem, gave me a good sense of detached, morose, nostalgic longing/pining. Only criticism is that I think you should split up the "I don't remember..." line onto two or ...

No Ursula K. Le Guin... =/