TheEstimableEelz

=D Time to review the heck out of "Other Poetry"

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Nice. It should be 'rests' in the last line of the first stanza, but I can see why it isn't, here. Dunno how I feel about that. As said before, ...

Most Likely to be a Janitor: Payne YWS Clown: Lumi Most Chatty: SisterItaly Most Likely to Get Killed by an Angry Mob of Writers: Vasticity Most Likely to be Elected ...

This was cute, I guess. I'm going to assume you have not yet had the time to proofread. When you do, be on the look-out for missing commas - your ...

I like it. Regardless, I think you could put some more work into the end-middle of the first stanza (after "very day;"). It's much less poetic in comparison to the ...

I can tell you, Payne. It is hard to come by because... okay, I don't really know. Ze poem, I am ambivalent about it. I want to like it, but ...

I suppose I have to tattle on Payne for fine wit and amicability.

Neat. As mentioned above, nice vocab. Love the flow of the piece - there was never a point where your line breaks, punctuation, or rhythm forced me to awkwardly change ...

Well, this was indeed enjoyable to read. However. There are certain flaws that need polishing. Too many exclamation marks! It took away (!) from the candidness and became ridiculous, even, ...

The Unicorn Forgot Happiness Alongside Batman Single horn above the bridge, what magic flies within your curvature? Sooth my wound gaping in metaphysical realms: aching to embrace your abrasive cloven

I find this wonderful, particularly the grammatical treat that is line six of "Panic." The only weak point readily apparent to me is the second line of "Consumerism." It is ...

Ooh, a rarity! A rhyming (non-professional) poem that I like. The rhythm is the best part of this; just a few bumps that I wish to amend. In my (not-so-)humble ...

This is hilarious, in a schadenfreude way. Also because of the way it's written. Love it. Love the not-quite stream-of-consciousness.

The Seagull It soars through the sky, gliding along the wind that invisibly supports its thoughtless aerodynamics. They say that it gathers the clouds, but thus to have sinned is ...