TheEstimableEelz

I like the language you're using here, but I feel like the poem thinks of itself as cleverer than it really is. You have elements that I have seen and ...

Generic subject+approach, I'm afraid. However, the diction is good. A few grammatical errors here and there, but I think you could actually add more to represent the speaker being really ...

Seems interesting... my guess for the title question is unwanted pregnancy for the 'you'. First, small grammatical corrections. You, everywhere; there were only a few places you weren’t. And you ...

A weird short story I wrote last year. Probably won't make sense the first time you read it - at least from my experience of other readers. Sorry for the ...

Nicely done! Certainly much better than what I expected from the title, and not nearly as cliche. - The main thing is that you overuse question marks. I understand why ...

Nice poem. Kind of cliche, but that's fine from time to time as long as you try to have a fresh perspective. Your site mentions that you played piano for ...

Thanks for commenting! The poem is literally just a 'day in the life' of the cup. No hidden meaning whatsoever.

Great poem. Wonderful build-up - at first it seems like two people together, talking back and forth, in a way that would commonly imply an impending break-up. Instead, the last ...

Yet another random poem. From a year ago. Trying to get a few differently written poems up so people can get a handle on my writing style. ^^ Calm stance, ...

Neat little poem. Hoping to find adventure - - Maybe use a comma instead of the dash, but definitely some sort of short pause is needed. Until I gave up ...

Oddly enough, I wrote a poem with the same title a year or two back (since changed simply to Strings , heh). Though, yours is nicer. I love the "sinister ...

Older poem than my previous submission (which is the latest poem I've done). Where to even begin - her hair, let loose to ensnare and bind me? Nah. Her vexatiously ...

Interesting poem. First, just a minor grammatical correction: from the insomniac ' s dream. I like how the third stanza suddenly has consistently longer lines than the rest of the ...

I love the poem's tone - it feels detached from but at the same time intricately connected to its subject, as though the connection allows for more objectivity rather than ...

I like it! I thought you did really well with your line breaks for most of the poem, though they felt somewhat random, like you weren't really thinking about them. ...