TheEstimableEelz

Cool poem. soft ribbon tie - I feel that 'tie' is unnecessary here The best part of this, for me, was the formatting and style. The flying/falling make a stark ...

Nice poem. The imagery is nice and consistent, as is the grammar. I agree with simplycomplex about the "As" lines beginning the poem. flame-gold en - just to be consistent ...

Lina Malina won't talk to me, She's quite busy, can't you See? Where this isn't headed: Meaning, you can't discern Just through sights and sounds, Nor feelings, though the point's ...

Wonderful poem! Just one suggestion: I have a work for thee : Take me on a creative ride. This would shorten the line, and reduce not its meaning/impact. Probably heighten ...

Nice, haven't really seen this kind of topic much. To get grammar out of the way: Why play the witch doctor biting at my core, engulfing , Now, a few ...

I like this, partially because I can still remember my own graduation, heh. I disagree with the previous comments - I feel you should keep "Life's persistent current" and "Whether ...

Wonderful poem. The tale relayed is classical and simple (seems to be the tale of Helios' son Phaëtōn), yet none the less well-told for it. Great line breaks, and the ...

Fun, already qualifying, adds excessively Via complements, boarding to prevent Boredom; ordinary is obsolete. Why… Merely swim through surf when you can Match that word, and streak above The water ...

You're welcome! And I only suggested adding the articles because I thought your teacher'd want 'em, so it's all good. And hey, one of my poems follows very rigid rules, ...

Nice!- about as well as one can manage with those rigid forms teachers so like in high school English. Just a few grammatical 'corrections', since your teacher will probably nitpick ...

A review would be greatly appreciated. Thank you.

I like this - there is not nearly enough (good) nonsensical writing on this site. That said, some opinionated advice: - If you're going to write a nonsense poem, it ...

Awesome poem! I disagree with the previous posters, I think you should leave in 'petite' -- the poem flows better with a 2-syllable word in there, and 'petite' is underused, ...

Your pacing is good and consistent - the reader doesn't have to pause awkwardly anywhere. The rhyme scheme is simple, but it works well. =] However... not to be mean, ...

The warmth, as of a hearth (song)? The choir, as of angels (beauty)? The magnificence, as of a painted Venus (smile)? The mirth, as of a newborn babe (magic)? With ...