TheEstimableEelz

Cool little poem. Like the concept, execution's pretty good. Normally, I love enjambment, but here it doesn't always seem to have a purpose; enjambment without a purpose seems silly if ...

Good poem! The first stanza drags a bit at the commas, and as such seems at odds with the rest; perhaps eliminate the first two and replace them with dashes. ...

Really like this poem! You've put in some creative metaphors without cluttering the poem with them, and stayed focused throughout (one of my issues, heh). Your title's a bit wonky ...

Cheery Feelin' Speeding toward a provincial town, the letters sealed in utmost solemnity, Bursting like a spontaneous smile upon shearing. Sheep, indeed these decisions are fuzzy, uncertain that the i

Neat poem; I like the formatting quite a lot. My one thing is "drumbeat voice" - I wouldn't think of a drumbeat as charming/beautiful/what have you. So, change that first ...

Not a bad poem! You stay on focus throughout, maintain your rhyme scheme, really the only thing I'd change is word choice; some of your lines feel a bit long ...

This was neat! It's evident that it appeared to be a story; stream-of-consciousness tends to be less clear, so if you want to make it more poetic I'd say create ...

This is a cool poem! I like the idea, but I agree with the previous comment that, apart from the periodical 'STOP,' there are no telegram connotations. The poem still ...

Neat poem, as usual. =] I think the middle is fine; for me, the weakest line is the last. With the line before it, the ending just gets a little ...

Great poem! I love the lack of punctuation here - it makes the poem feel much more free and open; it feels sort of like stream-of-consciousness, almost reminding me of ...

Four scored, and seven years ago, at a 'Battle of the Bulge' where your ma defended her capital of V. First strike - an incursion Groping through for terrain data ...

Interesting little poem. The idea is nice, and can definitely be lengthened. But if you want to keep the length as is, I'd say to capitalize a little, remove a ...

Interesting... this sounds like the opening credits song to a show. The imagery was so-so: not bad and certainly very appropriate to the topic, but somewhat passe/run-of-the-mill. However, your positi

Saw the title and the author, and was immediately intrigued - and you didn't disappoint. It's a simple, fun topic and a simple, fun poem. =] The imagery is great, ...

Lone, rusty light bulb- illumine my thought. Flick'ring periodically, shining through the clutter. Canvas in corner, half-finished portrait of which I can't even Remember – the subject. Some scripts