TheEstimableEelz

Gathering Magicks A pedagogue came rolling down upon the other morn, questioning my flavor text and jesting but wit scorned – So many throwaways and blotted strike-through lines cluttered drifting ...

Aww, why didn't I see this thread until now?

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This was somewhat cool. This is a very, very simple poem, and that's good! I can see this being published in some good book of poems for children. You have ...

Certainly a good base for construction. Pronoun trouble: most of the pronouns I found very difficult to conclusively link back to a noun or nouns. Clarity is really hurt; also, ...

Well, the poem itself is certainly (de)composed well. Some quick notes on things that jumped out: - "much" in the second line does not particularly work; grammatically it is fine, ...

'spolding' ... might as well have said 'smouldering,' ya know, or 'smoulding' if you were determined to have the fake word. Okay poem otherwise. A few things jumped out as ...

Equations, or Life as a Rhombus To be no one, act as everyone, and subtract anyone you meet. Make a soul by slowly roasting the heart, before peeling it off. ...

Lovely. The comma in the third line needs to go, methinks. But otherwise I whole-heartedly approve of the addition of punctuation. Although a piece so much about flow might well ...

This was fairly nice, but not perfect. Okay, review time. The extension of his arm split the air in two, filling itself with a lot less than that of pride. ...

Nice. First off, grammar slips are plentiful throughout, and they really distracted me from reading what is an otherwise gorgeously-constructed piece. Go through and seek them out, eliminate them, and

Reality-warping powers. >=D

This was neat. The title is a bit too serious for my tastes, considering your tone and subject matter. But, I can't think of many silly ways to say "Silent ...

Agree with inkwell, the peer pressure thing is ubiquitous. And if I may add, only on YWS: ... is TV Tropes a top-tier encyclopedia ... are the mods humble and ...

Good-looking poem. Now first thing, I don't think you needed an explanation at all down there after the poem, and certainly not such a detailed one. We readers appreciate figuring ...