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Guten Tag! (I am only half German, but you pick up on things) any ways, wow, That was excellently written, it starts slow, making seem like an every day person, ...

Nice, I Love this story, it is completely Greek, the way the gods and goddesses interact is unlike what most religion are like, most are strict and philosophical, and they ...

Ok Cal. is right, you could do without the repetition. While reading you could easily lose your place, because ever other line is the same. The poem does not exactly ...

Cool we will live on Mars! Now nice prologue, it defiantly raises interest in the story, and it will defiantly make you want to figure out what was wrong, but ...

Now I am not going to get too technical here, I like to focus on the story, and then specific grammar, well I am not the best at that, so ...

Awesome, you were able to grab the attention of the reader right away, and were were able to hold it. Nice job. You did a nice job with the scenery, ...

That was vary nice, but as what was said before, that was like looking at a dictionary. Now I am one for good vocabulary, the bigger the words the better. ...